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Saturday Flash Fiction: The Doll

Posted Lili Saintcrow

What sparked this one: This news story.
The Prompt: The doll appeared on the porch Friday evening, with blank black button eyes and a soft vacuous smile.
The Limit: 300 words

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Michael Mock
Michael Mock
The doll appeared on the porch Friday evening, with blank black button eyes and a soft vacuous smile. Abi played with it her room, and tucked it into her bed when it was time to sleep. On Saturday, she carried everywhere she went: to the store with her parents, to the restaurant for lunch, to the park to play. Abi was very proud of the way the doll slid down the slide all on its own. The doll was heavy, and seemed to get heavier the longer she carried it, but Abi didn’t mind. When bedtime came, she tucked it… Read more »
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3 years ago
Lili Saintcrow
Lili Saintcrow

I like this. Well done.

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3 years ago
Michael Mock
Michael Mock

Thanks! It was creepy little writing prompt; but then, it was a creepy little news story, too.

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3 years ago
Michael Mock
Michael Mock

The word count limit was tricky. It cut off the very last line, which was going to to be: “That was when Jill Kismet kicked the door in.”

…Okay, not really, but I do kind of feel like it should have been.

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3 years ago
Stephanie
Stephanie

Nicely done!

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Sean Coleman
Sean Coleman
The doll appeared on the porch Friday evening, with blank black button eyes and a soft vacuous smile. Accompanied with a note for its intended this doll was the results of months of labour and research hand crafted for a single purpose to right a wrong! Well that was its intended purpose. But due to a tangled web of lies and deceit fuelled mostly by alcohol and the pressure of trying to fit into ones peer group after a pro longed absence, a poor innocent infant would be deprived of a parent and unlike a television drama there is no… Read more »
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